After going over my second draft there are still a few channges that have to be made. They are mainly small English changes and are also where i have misplaced certain things that are supposed to be in other scenes.
First of all the English changes that need to be made are that i need to write in full sentences to give the script a sense of feeling. For example in the first 'side of a country road' shot i need to change the text with the new text 'Pair of smart loafers pedal quickly.'
Secondly, to do with English i still need to remove some small technical details that shouldn't be present, for example; 'Following' and 'Zooms in'.
Thirdly, is where i have misplaced certain items, where they should really be in other scenes. For example, in the 'living room in a house' scene i need to move the description of the characters mise en scene, up to the scene; 'A hallway in a house'.
Overall, i think that my script has gotten better but just needs to have the small changes made to it, so that therefore i can have a good working script.
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After going over my second draft there are still a few channges that have to be made. They are mainly small English changes and are also where i have misplaced certain things that are supposed to be in other scenes.
First of all the English changes that need to be made are that i need to write in full sentences to give the script a sense of feeling. For example in the first 'side of a country road' shot i need to change the text with the new text 'Pair of smart loafers pedal quickly.'
Secondly, to do with English i still need to remove some small technical details that shouldn't be present, for example; 'Following' and 'Zooms in'.
Thirdly, is where i have misplaced certain items, where they should really be in other scenes. For example, in the 'living room in a house' scene i need to move the description of the characters mise en scene, up to the scene; 'A hallway in a house'.
Overall, i think that my script has gotten better but just needs to have the small changes made to it, so that therefore i can have a good working script.
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